“How do I evaluate my GMAT AWA essay?” “How can I get GMAT AWA scores for practice?” “Are there any free good online AWA essay raters?”

These are questions that we got from many MBA applicants. So I brushed up my rusty programming skills, read up on the basics of NLP and created this automated AWA essay rater.

If you want to know whether those GMAT AWA templates you downloaded from various online forums are really useful, create a few GMAT AWA sample essays and test them out here using our GMAT AWA Rater. Though even the best essay checker software cannot match the accuracy of the official test, it’s still a good way to know where you stand.

Read these GMAT AWA essay tips. Once you are ready to get some practice, come back to this page and try out the GMAT AWA Rater which will rate your AWA essays. You can do it any number of times. And yeah, it’s free.

### How to use the GMAT AWA Rater to evaluate & grade GMAT essays

Step 1: Write your GMAT AWA essays in a text editor (like Notepad or MS Word).
Step 2: Organise the AWA essay into paragraphs.
Step 3: Enter a blank line to indicate the completion of a paragraph.
Step 4: Copy and paste the entire AWA essay in the big text box below.
Step 5: Click on the ‘Check’ button.

The rating for your AWA essay will be displayed below the button.

[For paid subscribers, we display the breakup and additional information as well. If you are a GMAT trainer and would like your students to access our premium version, get in touch with us.]

### Parameters on which your GMAT AWA essay samples would be rated

Coherence and connectivity: This rating evaluates how the expressions & ideas flow across paragraphs. Whether you are expressing a point of view for or against an argument, you can increase this rating by effectively using structure words and connectives. This strengthens the linkage of common themes across the essay.

Organization: How you’ve divided the AWA essay into relevant paragraphs is tested under this parameter. You can take this score higher by organizing the essay into paragraphs. It is also desirable to demarcate the ideas by following the regular convention of leaving blank lines to mark the logical and physical conclusion of that idea. The next paragraph can then build upon a related by distinct idea.

Readability: Your grasp on the language and your ability to display the variety in it is tested here along with the sentence structure. You don’t get brownie points for complicated sentences. Keep it simple and structured.

Note: While the GMAT provides scores at intervals of 0.5 only, this GMAT AWA Rater provides scores in continuous decimal points so that you can know exactly how you’ve been progressing with every attempt.

### Essay Checker Limitations: What the GMAT AWA Essay Rater can’t do

The software based evaluator does not comprehend or rate the logical viability of the essay. The submitted piece is evaluated as an independent argument essay on the above mentioned attributes. In the current version, the software skips grammatical mistakes. There may be many other limitations as well. Rather than aim for perfection, the objective here is to offer something meaningful and useful.

So instead of trying to focus on the shortcomings, use the output as an additional data point and continue using the other GMAT AWA templates or samples that you have, to improve your AWA skills.

And while you focus on GMAT prep, make sure you understand the bigger picture of the world you are trying to enter. Read Beyond The MBA Hype.

Also read these MBA application success stories of applicants just like you who have overcome low GMAT scores to get into good business schools, many with partial and full tuition waivers and MBA scholarships.

### Start using the GMAT AWA Rater

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Disclaimer: The GMAT AWA rater uses a proprietary algorithm that has no connection with the official GMAT AWA rating logic. Neither the software nor MBA Crystal Ball are connected with the official GMAT team. The results aren’t meant to be an accurate indicator of your performance on the real GMAT test. Use it for practice and at your own risk.

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1. @S says:

The rater is no more accepting the essay I put in the box. Has it stopped working? Does it require any registration process which I need to go through.

2. Sameer Kamat says:

For security reasons, the AWA essay rater had an upper limit set for the number of essays that could be tested. That number got shattered pretty quickly.

Seems like we underestimated the popularity of this tool.

We’ve increased the upper limit, so you should be able to get your AWA essays rated.

3. Bharath says:

4. Sameer Kamat says:

@Bharath: The tool is only meant to provide an estimation. Read the section on limitations of the AWA rater. Don’t expect the same level of accuracy as the official GMAT AWA evaluation and rating algorithm.

5. meril says:

Is there any’ minimum number of words requirement’ for GMAT AWA?

6. Bharath says:

Thanks a lot Sameer

7. Sameer Kamat says:

Pulkit, the tool doesn’t ask for the code now. Please try again.

On the accuracy part, I also tried with dummy samples with varying degrees of quality – some good, some outright pathetic – and the generated score ranged from 0.something to over 6.0

But like I’ve mentioned earlier, the tool isn’t perfect. In fact, no third party tool can emulate exactly what the original (and proprietary) GMAT algorithm does.

As you’ve pointed out, there aren’t many similar free tools out there. So have fun with it, but take the results with a pinch of salt.

8. Pulkit says:

Hi Sameer,

This site now requires a code, for a user to be able to take the test, user needs to register on the website. Site allows max 10 attempts per registration. However, i have a doubt on the efficacy of the tool. I have been constantly scoring 5.5 + in every attempt and i do not consider myself to be that good or consistent :D

Is there any other alternate tool available online? I tried looking for one but could not find it out.

Thanks!

9. Pulkit says:

Thanks a ton Sameer!

I tried, and it worked! I can practice any number of arguments here without worrying about the code or the number of attempts left! Big thanks =)

10. jd says:

It says “Unlock the Free AWA essay samples rating tool using your social media account.”
I shared it on twitter but still I am not able to access it.

Please let me know how to use it?

11. Sameer Kamat says:

@jd: Your share hasn’t registered on Twitter. Are you sure you were logged in?

12. sudesh says:

According to the author the advertising on radio station helped the Cumquat Café to grow up the revenue. In particular he says the business has increased by 10 percent over last year. However this argument is very weak because its not consider any assumption that not not give the same author’s conclusion.

Fist the argument ready assumes that the success of Cumquat Café is cased by the only advertising on local radio. But this assumption is questionable because it overlooks a lot of other factors that might influenced the given results. For example the success is the consequence of the change of the menu or thanks to the change of the Café’s staff ( at firstly the chiefs). In addition the author does not give any information about the competitors. Infact the increase of the Café’s business is due to the come out of any local competitor. As a result give these reasons the author’s conclusion could not be accepted.

In the second place the argument claims that the advertising on radio gives more positive prospects in terms of profitable. Even if it is granted that the advertising on radio helps to increase the visibility the same success is not guaranteed to any and all other business. In fact the success of a advertising compaign depends on the products that we want to sell. Once again the author’s conclusion in unconvincing.

In conclusion, the argument is flawed for above-mentioned reasons and it is therefore unconvincing. It could be considerably strengthened if the author has considered more other variables.

13. Mandeep says:

Dear Sameer,
Thank you for serving us this amazing thing. Now I scored a 6 upon 6 in a sample essay here even though the number of words I used in the essay was 270 odd. Does that matter in GMAT(the total number of words used in the essay)?

14. Mansi says:

In the passage the author arrived at a conclusion that investors are best served by increasing their exposure to precious metals in order to take advantage of unique profit-making opportunity.Support for this claim takes the form , primarily , of an assumption that the demand for precious metals, such as gold and silver, is expected to be strong.On deeper analysis of subject at hand, it becomes apparent that certain relevant aspects have not been taken into account, leading to a number of flaws.

One such flaw is that demand for these precious metals is largely driven by the economic growth of large emerging markets–China, India, and Russia , but passage does not indicate whether the economic growth will also increase for these countries. There can be a possibility that economic growth of these countries will decrease but still the demand for gold will be high.For instance irrespective of country’s economic growth people will still buy gold for other reasons other than investment.

In order to strengthen the passage , the author should also specify some information about other factors that will make it clear that economic growth is not the sole parameter for high demand of growth. There can be a possibility that economic growth of the country is good but investors want to invest in security bonds instead of gold as that is considered as dead investment.

Another such flaw which significantly weakens the argument, is the assumption that investors who invest in gold will get the best result in comparison with those who have invested in other metals or securities, although it is not mentioned about the later investors.

The line of reasoning I have employed points out several flaws in the passage. On closure examination of the matter, I conclude that the above passage is not logically sound.

15. Nisha says:

This is the essay i wrote. Can anyone help me know my rating for the below mentioned essay ?

1. “What really matters in the leadership of business and organizations is getting results, reaching benchmarks, and achieving success.” – In this issue the importance of ways of achieving success have been stated. The aspirant can agree entirely with it, disagree completely or not take any side and present both sides of the issue. In any case, these need to be substantiated with actual examples of where business organizations either benefit from a result-oriented approach or they did badly because of it.

In the above argument the author has very correctly stated the formula for growth and success in a company or any organization. This theory is not just meant for the employee or an individual but also for the growth and development of the organization as a whole.
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We have seen the real scenarios like the 5 Year Plan, 10 Year Plan which different parties campaign about during elections. These target set by the party, makes a citizen to vote for a party and give them an opportunity to form government if the impact and result of these target are convincing to the audience. As and when the party comes into power, they put in their best effort to achieve the target and give results as they very well understand that only results will help them to continue their government else, the party might be voted out !
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Competition is everywhere. It may be schools, colleges, firms, organizations etc. One has to get the results within the set time to prove himself/herself over others . Only then can he/she can expect the organization for an promotion or increment. A theory which runs very truly in today’s scenario is the: Survival of the Fittest..!!
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16. Sameer Kamat says:

@Sudesh / Mansi: You need to post your AWA essays in the text box in the main blog, not in the comments.

@Nisha: Probably the special characters (line) are causing the issue. Try pasting pure text.

17. Twinkle says:

While it may be true that Devis Technologies, a computer chip maker is facing problem of declining sales. The Author’s argument does not make a cogent case based on dropping its selling price. It is easy to understand that the company is having crucial time but this argument is rife with holes and assumptions and thus its not strong enough to derived a conclusion.

Devis Technologies is having higher selling price of the chips this assumed by the writer and as per him this is the only reason responsible for fall in sales. Even to strengthen this argument he has not given any evidence. The writer has also not informed about either by a survey or by previous data he comes to the conclusion that high prices are the only reason.

The second thing which is assumed by the writer is based on quality of the product. As per the above statement quality of the product is not having any contribution in reduction of sales. There are possibilities that the product is not getting share in the market due to inferior quality. Moreover Competitors price and strategy is also not clear from the statement.

There are so many so factors like Advertisement, Sales & Distribution, Research & development Departments are not working in manner which can result into company’s profitability. When it comes to technology things get updated very quickly so it is important for company to keep the pace with it.
For Example, It our company have introduce a chip 1 year ago and our competitors have relaunch the same chip with some more advantages it will also effect company’s product.

Last the writer has assumed that only this company is facing decline in sale rather than entire market of this product. It may possible that this is recession time for this product and every one is facing the same situation.

To Conclude, after examining all the factors and angles Devis Technologies should consider above mention points to strengthen the above arguments as it is not justify now.

18. Sameer Kamat says:

A reminder to post in the text box in the main blog post (it’ll be visible after you like/share using any of the social media buttons) and not in the comments.

19. Pavitra says:

The argument in asserting that greater government involvement in regulating the food manufacturing industry and laying emphasis on adding more minerals and vitamins in it’s products as a counter measure to reduce the rate of adult-onset diabetes appears at first glance to be coherent and fairly convincing. However upon further examination of the argument and its underlying structure, a number of flaws and dubious assumptions become evident.

Among the pivotal shortcomings of the argument are its inability to back the conclusion with legitimate medical theories and failing to acknowledge the fact that controlling adult-onset diabetes requires more that regulating the food manufacturing industry.

Primarily, there is no statistical backing to the statement that the onset of diabetes is due to quality of foods available at low prices. The argument fails to answer whether adult-onset diabetes occurs only among people who eat food products available at low prices in comparison with control group, of people who never have food products at low prices.

Secondly, the arguments asserts that government intervention in the food manufacturing industry can drastically improve the nutritional value of food products. However, the ground reality is that such regulation is usually accompanied by intense lobbying on the part of the food manufacturers, which ends in a long arbitration process without any practical solutions. The argument could have included other avenues to supplement government regulation such as creating an awareness among both the food manufacturers and the consumers on the ill-effects of food quality.

Finally, assuming that the government is successful in making the food industry to include more vitamins and minerals, there is no factual data that suggests adult-onset of diabetes occurs due to lack of vitamins and minerals, and an increased intake of these nutrients will curb its rate. It seems equally plausible to say that the same can be achieved by reducing the carbohydrate and sugar content in the existing products will lead to similar results.

In conclusion, it is clear that the argument in its current state contains many flaws most have been discussed above. Ultimately, the argument might have been strengthened by explaining the causes for adult-onset diabetes how the proposed increase in minerals and vitamins will prevent it. Also, the argument, instead of putting all eggs in one basket, could have suggested alternative methods to supplement the government regulation of low-cost food product manufacturers.

20. Srini says:

Awesome man! Thanks and much appreciated!

21. Abhishek says:

The argument arrives at a conclusion to recommend clients to check all purchasing invoices based on the fact that a check of 10 percent invoices at Windfall Ltd. resulted in a \$10,000 profit. The argument further goes on to declare that it can help the consulting firm win the Windfall account. The presented argument has some merit, but it fails to be convincing as the premise seems to be insufficient and the logic to arrive at the conclusion seems to be flawed at various levels.

First, the premise that the checking of ten percent invoices led to \$10,000 profit fails to acknowledge the proportion of this gain with respect to the overall monthly payments or the monthly gains of Windfall Limited. For example, if the firm makes about \$100 million in payments every month and achieves about \$50 million in net profit, then the \$10,000 gain might not be very significant to the firm. Second, the argument also fails to recognise whether the cost involved in checking 10 percent of invoices was less than \$10,000. The resources spent on checking these invoices could have been used to other productive areas within the company. Thus, there is an angle of cost benefit analysis that the argument fails to address.

Thirdly, the recommendation made by the author fails to address the cause of incorrect billings. Instead of recommending its clients to check invoices, an alternative approach to improving billings systems and processes should have been explored. Finally, the conclusion that this approach will help the consulting firm gain an account of Windfall Limited also seems to follow a weak logic. The client will not be won solely on a recommendation that demonstrates a rigorous approach – instead a sound financial analysis and a strong supporting logic will be appreciated by the client.

Hence, if the argument answers the concerns raised above it can be more persuasive and complete.

22. sim says:

The assistant manager presents the evidence that when music of a particular country is played, the sale of wine from that country is greater than the sale of wine from another country. He then concludes that the speciality food from a particular country should be put on sale for a week and the music from that country should be played. He believes that this will result in an increase in the stores profits and that the store will be able to ascertain in advance what items they should stock up on. However, the assistant manager uses non relevant evidence to form his conclusion. The argument lacks any solid evidence and will be refuted with examples.

The comparison of wine sales to the sale of other items is not valid, as the wine is not on discount whereas the manager recommends that the other items be put on discount. A consumer will buy items on sale, irrespective of the music played. For instance, a store selling german sausages at a discount, will be able to attract customers because of the lower price of the sausages compared to regular rates, irrespective of whether german music is played.

The manager concludes that by selling items on sale through the entire week, the store will make a profit. Surely, even if this were true it cannot be the best case scenario as an even more substantial profit could be made by selling the items at full price, and hence receiving a larger margin of profit. Further, to sell items on sale for a whole week the store would have to have a phenomenal amount of stock in its warehouse, of items from that particular country whose produce is on sale. Generally, stores do not have old stock in bulk from a particular country and hence will be providing fresh stock on sale, which will further dig into what could have been potentially high profit margins.

Finally, while the manager cites the effect of music on wine sales, he concludes about the effect of music on sales of all food from a country. This is an invalid assumption. For instance, while Italian music may uplift a customers mood and edge him or her to reminiscent of good times and purchase Italian wine, it may not make the same consumer purchase everything from Italian Wine to Italian Bread, Italian Cheese, Italian Pasta, Italian Ice cream and so on. Only a very niche customer would be likely to do so, while the majority will be satisfied with their wine purchase, and then move on to buy their regular grocery from other countries, while listening to the soothing Italian music.

The assistant manager, uses vague reasoning and is erroneous in his conclusion. To strengthen his conclusion he would have to cite relevant facts. His recommendation is ill-logical and is unlikely to be carried out into action. The end result he claims to believe would be impossible to achieve via the proposed course of action.

23. Karna Bhat says:

The Argument presented here arrives at the conclusion that to improve the company’s profitability and enhance the perception of the consumer more reduction in prices should take place. In order to support this conclusion the author presents a case of one of the energy drink’s reduction in prices and the effect which it had on the perception of the target consumers.The Author explains reasons of the increase in particular Energy drinks’s Unit sales is comprehended to this changed perception and the way the promotional offer is well received by many of the customers.

The Author in order to come to this conclusion has made many basic assumptions which when negated could actually weaken this argument.Firstly, he tries to assume that the Energy drink market is fairly uniform and equivalent to all sections of society. Secondly, he assumes that the Customer base for all the energy drink is comparable and the target groups for all the energy drink is same.Finally, he fails to consider the Overall increase in sales of the energy drinks with regards to his competitors by mistakenly assuming that only his energy drink has increase in the sales without considering the market share increase of his drink.

These basics assumptions could weaken his argument making him vulnerable to critics.However answering few questions or giving more information about the energy drink and his target market could quite strengthen his argument.Information about the market share of the energy drink is required.Also it would be good basis to give the data of the Competitor’s sales which could make the Unit sales of the company more comparable and more strong with statistics.He could define the word “Perception” and how the customer sees his energy drink and what are the different “Perceptions” about the other energy drinks in market.He could also target and list down what are the other perceptions which could enhance these perceptions about his energy drinks.

Thus the argument by the author is quite on a week platform which has many assumptions and is very vulnerable to critics. Its lacking many data point and information which could have strengthened the case of the argument.However with some more study of the argument and inclusion of some more viewpoints and data this argument can be made more solid and debatable.

24. Kavita Mahto says:

Q. The following appeared in a memorandum from the business department of the Apogee Company:
“When the Apogee Company had all its operations in one location, it was more profitable than it is today. Therefore, the Apogee Company should close down its field offices and conduct all its operations from a single location. Such centralization would improve profitability by cutting costs and helping the company maintain better supervision of all employees.”

Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument. In your discussion be sure to analyse the line of reasoning and the use of evidence in the argument. For example, you may need to consider what questionable assumptions underlie the thinking and what alternative explanations or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion. You can also discuss what sort of evidence would strengthen or refute the argument, what changes in the argument would make it more logically sound, and what, if anything, would help you better evaluate its conclusion.

Essay:

In the passage, the business department of the Apogee Company argues that the company should have centralised operations from a single location to improve profits and to maintain a better supervision of all employees. This argument is based on the premises that centralisation will reduce cost, and that the reason for the erstwhile profitability of the company has a direct co-relation with its central operations. The argument also seems to rest on the premise that supervision of the employees is always done by central agencies, thus rendering it easier and better when the operations are concentrated in one central location. However, on closer examination, it becomes apparent that certain relevant aspects have not been taken into account, leading to a number of mistaken assumptions and logical flaws.

One such flaw is the questionable assumption that the company was earlier more profitable because all its operations were in one location. However, no data has been given in support of this assumption. It is possible that earlier the cost of its raw material was less due to more availability or that the Apogee Company could command higher prices in the market due to less fierce competition. There could be several other reasons as well. In order to strengthen this assumption, the company should analyse the relevant data to find out exactly what the reason for higher profitability was and whether it had anything to do with centralised operations or some other factors (such as demand, cost of the input material, change in taxation, etc.)

Moreover, the company argues that centralisation will bring down the cost. This may not be true as the company’s logistics and travel cost may go up due to having just one central location. A comparative analysis of relevant data points such as reduction in the cost of real estate and maintenance of various operations vis-à-vis increased travel cost and freight cost would help better understand whether the aforementioned assumption is a sound one.

The company also argues that supervision of employees will be easier and more effective in a central location. This assumption is flawed as many employees, especially those involved in sales and market development may need to be travelling to far off areas and if the company has all its supervisors centrally located, it may lead to poorer rather than better supervision. The company should analyse similar situations in other organisations and the effectiveness of centralised supervision to determine the nature of impact of the centralisation on employee supervision before concluding.

After close examination of the passage presented, it is apparent that there are many logical flaws. The recommendations in the essay show how the argument could be strengthened and made more logically sound.

25. sdj says:

It says failed to load :(
Can you copy paste it for me and tell me my result?

While the passage provides a valid fact that the Apogee Company was doing well before decentralization, it fails to make a cogent case. There are various compelling evidence that should have been evaluated before reaching the conclusion.

Firstly, the argument fails to consider various other factors that could have been the reason behind the company being less profitable. Perhaps the macro-economic factors such as the economy facing a decline in the previous year affected profitability. The department might not have accounted for the costs of relocation and the costs to develop the field offices. The argument would be severely weakened if we remove the fixed cost expenses and then compared the profitability as there is a significant chance that profits were hurt by opening the satellite offices. Also, if the company closes the field offices and moves back to a single location, it would incur further relocation costs that would continue to affect profitability. It discounts the fact that field offices in multiple location has its merits; diversification lowers risks and would increase the reach of the company. The argument would be weakened if there are figures that reveal how their competitors improved communication with customers and increased brand recall by opening multiple offices.

Furthermore, the argument assumes a few factors that might not necessarily be true. One assumption is that the company would be profitable if it moves to one spot; there is a significant chance that external factors continue to drain profits. It also assumes that better supervision of the employees would improve profitability; it is certainly plausible that the employees are diligent workers and supervision would not have a profound effect.

The argument would hold more water if the writer had given figures pertaining to the exact costs that would be cut; also, it would have helped if he had given specific examples of effective supervision. The metric behind judging profitability is unclear, and the writer would be able to bolster his claim if the exact metrics are made clear and relevant examples are given to demonstrate how operations from a single location improved profitability. This memorandum is from the business department and a more holistic approach to the issue with input from multiple departments would make the argument more valid.

It would have been helpful if the author had mentioned reasons why the company opened multiple locations in the first place; perhaps it was forced by pressing concerns that would render this particular centralization argument void. Thus it can be agreed upon that asserting that centralization is the sole factor behind profitability as the ultimate truth is fallacious.

“Education comes not from books but from practical experience.”

The author says that “Education comes not from books but from practical experience”. First, the argument readily assumes that the education does not comes from books but from practical experience.This statement is a stretch and not substantiated in any way. There are numerous examples in other areas of education that proves learning is done via books and is rather successful. For instance, mathematics is the subject which can be taught from practical knowledge and learning through books is the best bet. Another example is the subject History. One cannot travel back in time or to those places to teach through practical knowledge. Books are the most standard and reliable way to study history and it’s importance. Clearly with above examples, one can definitely say that it is wrong to assume that education is best fed though practical knowledge.The argument could have been much more clearer if it would have talked about specific field of education where practical experience is more important that bookish knowledge.

Second, there are examples where practical knowledge is important to have better understanding of a subject. But this in no way allows to scrape out the learning from books. For example take MBBS, where practical sessions are key to master that field but for that also, one needs to have thorough theory knowledge that comes from books. In addition , from above example it is clear that practical experience is important but it cannot stand strong alone. It has to be combined with good theory lessons. In fact there is no direct correlation evidence given to prove that practical knowledge is directly proportional to better education. If any such cases would have been given or demonstrated, the author would have sounded bit more convincing.

Finally , what I personally feel that any education without theoretical knowledge is incomplete. Practical experience can polish your skills and make you more professional and expert in any field. For that to happen, one’s theory base has to be really strong to excel. Is it possible to make primary school pass out , a manager of a company ? Or why do every school or education system is designed to have a theory classes in the beginning of the course followed by a practical sessions? Without having convincing answers to these questions, one is left with the impression that the claim is more of a wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence.

“What really matters in the leadership of business and organizations is getting results, reaching benchmarks, and achieving success.”

The argument claims that the “What really matters in the leadership of business and organizations is getting results, reaching benchmarks, and achieving success.” Stated in this way the argument fails to mention several key factors, on the basis of which it could be evaluated. The conclusion of the argument relies on the assumptions for which there is no clear evidence.Hence argument is weak and has several flaws.

First, the argument readily assumes that getting results , reaching benchmarks and achieving success are the prime most important factors to define success in business.This statement is the stretch and is not substantiated in any way. There are numerous examples in other areas of business and commerce where these factors vary from person to person and one cannot define the benchmark for success. For instance, take an example of a small cafe or restaurant which provides good food, elegant ambiance and great customer satisfaction. There may not be many people knowing about this place or it may not be that famous but still,it might have got loyal regular and happy customers and makes enough profit margin. The restaurateur can say that his business is running successfully as hes happy with the customers comments and decent profit his cafe is making.On the other hand, take an example of McDonalds, we all know how much popular it is across the globe and thousands of customers visit it daily , making the profits in millions. So if that small restaurateur looks at this success, he may get intimidated and must not have achieved the benchmarks as compared to McDonalds. Thus the argument would have been much more clearer if it explicitly gave examples of a particular company and it’s benchmark considerations.

Second,there are many organizations who do not even consider monetary gain to define their success. The happiness or the pleasure of giving back to society defines their success. Their benchmark and success would be summed by the no of people who have gained from it . One such example is Teach for India. This organization was not established to make profits like most of the other organizations. They help children from all parts of India getting basic education with the aim of making everyone educated and make them stand on their own legs. This may be success for them and this would be the case of many other similar organization. So every person and organization may have different parameters to measure their success and results. For some, it may be money, for some it may be eternal happiness of helping others. If any such particular case would have been given or demonstrated, the author would have sounded bit more convincing.

Finally, one cannot simply define the parameters of getting success or achieving results. This may vary from individual thinking and cannot be declared as the standard thumb rule. So author should have specified it more clearly with examples. Making money may be success for one but not for other. Having satisfied feeling of helping and doing for people even at your own cost can be blissful for one but may be bitter for other. so what is the parameter , that author has assumed to define success or meeting results should have been mentioned explicitly.

In conclusion, the argument is flawed for the above-mentioned reasons and is therefore unconvincing. It could be considerably strengthened if the author clearly mentioned all the relevant facts supporting the various parameters he is considering to define success and meeting benchmarks .In order to assess the merits of a certain situation/decision, it is essential to have full knowledge of all contributing factors. Without this information, the argument remains unsubstantiated and open to debate.

28. Ramya says:

Discoveries and inventions are not born from nothingness. If necessity is the mother of invention, then an equally competent father would be a combination of curiosity, scientific temperament, and research skills. With the firm belief that I possess these skills, I aspire to fulfill my dream of pursuing advanced research in an application-oriented field, by obtaining my Master’s degree in Electrical engineering. As a stepping-stone towards this dream, I am pursuing my Bachelor of Technology degree in Electronics and Instrumentation Engineering from SRM University, ranked first among many private institutions in India. This has laid a strong foundation for my graduate studies.

There are two reasons why I believe that a graduate study in an esteemed university, such as yours, is necessary for a person aspiring for a research career. Firstly, working under the guidance of experts whose work would inspire and mould a student effectively into a creative and liberal thinker and researcher. Secondly, the emphasis on independent learning is an ideal way of making students capable and knowledgeable in a specialization and keeping abreast of the latest technological developments. Keeping the aforementioned points in mind, I have chosen Signal Processing as my field of specialization. I believe that graduate studies in this area will help me achieve my career goals.

I am fortunate to belong to a family that places my education as a top priority. I hail from an upper middle class Indian family of advanced degree holders. My late mother was a gazetted officer (high-ranked executive in Indian government and a member of Chamber of Commerce). My father is an administrative official in the Indian law ministry. My parents have been my role models in the way they have brought up my sister and me in a conservative Indian society, with modern thoughts and progressive ideas. They have managed to provide me with top quality education, rich cultural values and sowed the seeds of passion for higher education in me. My elder sister is pursuing her PhD in Bio-engineering at Chicago and I have always admired her dedication and perseverance in her area of interest. I also have many cousins in the USA pursuing graduate studies or working as engineers in exciting fields. Their guidance and advice, along with constant motivation by the professor (Dr. Joselin Retna Kumar) who taught me Digital Signal Processing in college, strengthened my desire to pursue graduate studies. Dr. Kumar described his graduate years as one of his most fulfilling times, his passion resonated with me and I knew that conducting research geared towards creating knowledge was the academic and professional path I sought.

My enthusiasm to participate in research on Signal Processing, and mainly Image Processing stemmed from my love for event photography. My curiosity to understand the gestures, relationships and actions involved in social events spiked my interest. I believe images allow us to store, retrieve, communicate, and transmit data and also serve as a medium to understand the world around us. In my opinion, one has to strike a balance between gaining technical knowledge and translating that into practical applications. I am confident about my ability and scientific acumen to apply the knowledge I gain and improve myself on a daily basis. Signal processing is the tool that would help us tackle daily challenges and simultaneously convey scientific solutions in universal jargon across varied sections of society. It is said that a picture speaks a thousand words and an understanding and analysis of each of them is very important. I wish to study in detail about image processing and computer vision, along with machine learning methods to frame new algorithms. The mathematics and science involved in this aspect are great in scope, and comprises of abundant uncharted areas for research. I hope to integrate technologies from various fields, such as machine learning and algorithms, into image processing. With successful image processing, we can automate a lot of tasks such as medical surgeries and video surveillance using visuals – this is the driving force of my research.

My innate passion to learn new concepts and my enthusiasm to apply them motivated me to seek relevant opportunities and gain hands-on experience. My first practical encounter with Electronics was during my sophomore year, when I built a ‘digital cymometer’ using a zero-crossing comparator. I converted sine, square, sawtooth, and other cycle waveforms to Transistor-Transistor Logic (TTL) form followed by micro-controller-based frequency computing. I optimized the code and algorithm to guarantee accuracy. This boosted my confidence to take up more challenging projects that included constructing a ‘traffic light control system’ using 89S51 micro-controller and building an ‘A/D and D/A converter’ using basic components such as ICs, diodes, transistors, and resistors. Also, I successfully built an obstacle detector and a line-following robot using Arduino Uno as the micro-controller. Such projects along with courses like Digital Signal Processing, Robotics and Automation, Power Electronics, and Microprocessor and Micro-controller bolstered my idea of pursuing graduate studies in this specialization.

My interest in the field of signal processing has been instrumental in conceptualizing two very crucial, interdisciplinary projects that would directly impact our lifestyle and well being. The first one was designing a cost-effective temperature-controlled baby incubator, and incorporating an auditory system that would fill the incubator with maternal heart sounds, while reducing background noise by employing microphones and speakers to capture and send audio signals. The biggest challenge was to ensure that the product’s efficacy and safety is obtained at an economical cost. Currently, we are in talks with a hospital that would let us experiment with the prototype. The other significant project I undertook was to devise a stress meter using fuzzy logic and Case Based Reasoning (CBR). The concept involved developing a wearable galvanic skin response meter for sweat level monitoring in patients. This response meter will detect anxiety and stress levels. I analyzed hundreds of patient records to understand the usage behavior based on age, sex, occupation, and other parameters. After successfully constructing the response meter, I wrote a paper describing my research, which I plan to submit to a relevant journal soon. Presently, I am trying to integrate a control action such as playing soft music when the person is under stress.

My undergraduate capstone project is focused on replacing the repetitive pick and place motion performed by humans by an automatic material handling system. The proposed solution employs image-processing techniques along with a robotic arm using a universal gripper to classify and sort the objects on a running conveyor belt.

The greatest supplement to my academic experience has been the opportunity to be part of service-learning. Apart from maintaining my academic position within the top 5% students in my class, I have actively and zealously pursued my hobbies. ”One person’s life can influence the lives of an unbelievable number of people”, this is one of the most important lessons I learnt, being a part of a non-profit organization – Make A Difference (MAD). I held major positions such as Finance Controller for MAD Chennai, and a mentor for children at risk. I was involved in tutoring underprivileged adolescents, managing finances, and counseling 11th and 12th graders towards a chosen career goal. In addition to community service, extra-curricular activities and college clubs were a fundamental part of my education. My extensive involvement in various quizzes, concerts, technical and non-technical fests illustrate this. Along with singing, I am also a keen basketball and a throw-ball player. I have led my team in numerous tournaments and competitions. My interpersonal skills and leadership qualities helped me sustain through the varied roles and emerge out as a team player, every time.

Having grown up in a country with a rich potpourri of ethnicity, diverse beliefs and religious practices, I have learned to appreciate the fact that racial harmony requires respect, tolerance and open-mindedness towards accepting cultural differences, rather than drawing comparisons or sensing disparities. Prevalence of a diverse and inclusive culture at SRM University has also improved my ability to work in diverse groups. Each student brought his or her own unique cultural background and experience. Living and learning together instilled
self-confidence and a spirit of camaraderie within me.

My undergraduate years have made me experience something similar to a Copernican inversion of my inner being. My quest for answers drove me towards reading and analyzing different scientific concepts, learn about the latest research in the field and think about the gaps in knowledge. Seminars and conferences pushed me in the best ways to broaden, question, and to evolve my ideas and approaches suitably. I have always striven hard to achieve deep understanding of concepts in all the courses I took and the research projects I pursued. The research carried on signal processing under Dr. Charles Boncelet, Dr. Kenneth E. Barner and Dr. Gonzalo R. Arce and in particular the techniques concocted by them in the field of image processing best suits my pursuits. I believe that I possess the desire, the intellectual ability, and the preparation to do justice to a demanding graduate program and to make significant contributions to the ongoing research at your University as a student, as a researcher and as a teaching assistant. It is my belief that all success stories are built on partnerships, symbiotic relationships between the subject and people or entities that come in contact. Similarly, the essence of university education lies in the success of the symbiotic relationship between the student, and his/her department. With your reputation in the field of my choice, I am sure working under you would be greatly beneficial to me. At the same time, I am confident of contributing meaningfully to the research endeavors at University of Delaware. It is with this in mind that I am looking forward to a long and rewarding relationship with you.

29. Abhishek I C says:

The conclusion, recent surge in violence in the west of the city is because of shortage of police officers could be right, as a neighborhood prone to continuous violence requires an adequate number of police force to keep a check on those, who indulge in fomenting tension. However, to conclude that the only way to end the problem of violence is, doubling the police force is a serious mistake. To affect permanent peace requires more than doubling the police force, and here the passage-writer makes a series of faulty conclusions about the problems in the west side of the city, and therefore suggests flawed solutions.
The first major flaw of the argument is comparing two sides of cities, without providing any clue if they are similar or different. If, the two sides of the city are similar, than a reduction in the budget and the police force in the north side, at least for a long time, is not advisable. However, if the north side of the city is not witnessing any violence due to composition of the society, than perhaps, its budget and the police force is just adequate to maintain the peace. Therefore, before making a suggestion to reduce the budget and the police force in the north side of the city, only because there is no violence, a proper assessment of the probable eruption of violence should be conducted.
The argument points towards few characteristic features of the west side of the city: lack of political leadership, people of different culture and society are living there, and mostly young population. Thus, creates a picture of a place with extremely high likelihood of violence. Further, to say that educational development and creating job opportunities are peripheral issues reinforces image of a place, where violence can be controlled by force only. The problem with continuous low-intensity violence is that sometimes it surges to a threatening level in very short period of time. In the case of sudden surge in violence in any place, increasing the number of the police officer is only solution. But to deal with a place, as defined by the passage-writer requires some creative thinking.
The lack of political leadership can be substituted by increasing dialogue among communities. The argument, the violence is also due to the lack of leadership is right. Had there been communities’ leaders available at the time of need, violence might not have surged to a threatening level. Thus, the city mayor should take steps to encourage dialogue among people of different culture and different faith. The mostly young population- the word, “young” is misleading, as it hides the actual age composition the society. However, if the word young refers to age group of 15 to 30, than the city mayor is right to focus on educational development and creating job opportunities- as idle youths often take to crime and violence.
Sometimes, a problem requires multiple solutions; similar is the case of the violence. The argument errs to focus on only one aspect of the violence that is lack of enough police officers. The city mayor has to look into various aspects of a problem. Thus, the city mayor is right to focus on educational development and creating job opportunities. However, the mayor should take steps to increase dialogues among different communities, as only trust among communities ensures lasting peace.
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